nitzan_schwarz
Written on Feb 15, 2017
Like, okay - I get it, they have this shared past. They've loved each other for ages but never acted on it. Cool. But I didn't get to see that, so it's not enough for you to just tell me this. You have to establish it. You have to make me feel it and believe it. Perhaps give me insight to these childhood times. You need to show me this love, and it's somehow doubly hard for authors to do when they have this crutch of "they are childhood friends. They've known each other for ages" to lean on. It's the same with me and soul mates - I love the idea, but it often just gives authors a way out of building and establishing the relationship.
Also, this novel was very, very predictable to me. The second they slept with each other for no protection and Cami was all calm because of the pill, I thought there was going to be a pregnancy plot line. The moment it was revealed Addie was pregnant, I knew for sure there will be. And ultimately, this baby was just such a throwaway, meant to add some tension to the story. That was resolved in two seconds flat. On the one hand, I'm happy this didn't drag. On the other, did you have to kill a baby for it? Sure, it made me emotional, but eventually I just kind of wondered what was the point. This was clearly done just for the "emotional weight" and not for any other story reasons, because it gave nothing to this characters
Oh, and let me just tell you... I don't find a guy breaking into the girl's place when she hasn't invited him romantic. You can tell me they're childhood friends and are comfortable with each other, you can try to make it seem okay by saying the girl used to break into his place to, but what this is is plain creepy. Stop.