The Wish

by Dahlia Lu

[inlibrisveritas]

So thankful that this was free, because if I had spent any amount of money on this I would have been very upset.
The story and concept is the one that drew me in because I am a sucker for this sort of thing. Lucifer falling in love sounds like it would pretty interesting, that is if it is written correctly. This wasn't. The writing was very simple, and not in a good way. It felt more like an amateur fanfiction story then a true novel, it was plain and uninspiring story that tried to hard to be a intelligent and embellished one. It felt as if a thesaurus was practically crammed into it, it just didn't flow like a naturally. The conversations felt scripted, like a soap opera. The plot moves way to fast so the character development is more instantaneous then anything.
There are few issues with the amount of spacing between paragraphs, especially when there is a time skip. It kept throwing me off and I had to go back and see what I had missed.
I didn't want to finish it but I did, and now I'm going to put this in a folder in my kindle and forget about it.