
ladygrey
Written on Jun 24, 2012
This wasn't bad, but there was a lot of plot for such a short story, so some of it seemed rushed or contrived and choppy. Also, Yelena was kind of dumb which I didn't like (that was the part that seemed contrived). But it was an interesting plot which was fun to read in its own way. Though I think it would have been better served by having a little more room.