celinenyx
Written on Aug 29, 2011
When the incubus Kenan sees a captured angel at the infamous Hellsgate market, he has to have her. What he doesn't know is that Jahel is not an ordinary angel, but one with the ability to steal his heart...
I found it highly unlikely for an angel to instantly lust after a demon. Isn't that entirely against every instinct an angel has? Shouldn't she be disgusted by his awful sins, by his collecting of souls that she tries to save? Both Kenan's and Jahel's thoughts were confusing to me, one second they lean this way, next second the other.
There was a little part focussing on a certain evil witch, and a bit of Four Horsemen lore that was pretty cool. It was well incorporated into the story, but I wish every problem wasn't solved so easily. It almost seemed like no trouble at all to overcome the Horseman War. I would expect more of a struggle there.
The writing isn't too bad, and the story isn't either. It just wasn't for me.