Reviewed by nannah on
I'll be honest, I didn't even make it to page 15. Whine all you want about me rating it one star without "giving it a fair chance," but there's no way I'm continuing on.
On the very first actual page:
1. every sentence is a fragment or a really small, simple sentence. I'm already sick of this author's style, and I've barely gotten a paragraph in.
2. "Instead, Kieran bawled like a girl." There's sexist language already. And within the next few pages, women are talked about like objects, sex toys, and young women (minors) are talked about sexually by much older men.
OK. This is the world this author decided to create. Because yes, he DECIDED to create it. He was not forced by any creative laws or anything. Plus, the story takes place on Mars. He had full control, and this is what he chose to do with it.
(also, after the first chapter, I already hated the MC. What an arrogant douche bag.)
Reading updates
- Started reading
- 15 October, 2015: Finished reading
- 15 October, 2015: Reviewed