tweetybugshouse
Written on Feb 9, 2016
The character descriptions i felt where muddled and would jump between points of view to where i would loose what the point of the paragraph was and who was really speaking or which characters was being referred to.
At the start of the book you have louanne interact with her best friend but it seems like they really don't know each other.
Parts of the story are stretched a bit to the point where though i know this all fantasy it still hard to ignore the facts-- like the gun getting wet, solder buying out businesses to buy the diamond.
A chapter was labeled A.S.H but by the end of the chapter i still not sure what that stands for i tend to take chapters headings as clues to information i should be learning in the chapter.
I had trouble knowing the age of the main character and not really even told until ch 14 which is 179 pages into the story which when i found out i thought the character should been much older.
Felt like i need a character chart in the book as i kept referring to page 155 where the relationships of some the characters are explained.
Pros the main concept of the story a child who is sucked into another world that is far different from ours, with abilities and the bad side effect of being controlled by a dark entity, is very well thought out. In the book you come across all kinds of great sci fi and fantasy elements that really create a unique unreal world. I think with help this story has a lot of potential and look forward to seeing what else this author has to share.