wyvernfriend
Written on Aug 20, 2009
There are some quirks that just don't gel quite right. He uses 'n' for and everywhere and 'm for him. He also has some long speeches that don't quite ring true for his circumstance.
This basically is a transcript of his hearing to determine his fitness to serve, and I'm sure if I had heard it I would have decided that he wasn't suited to warfare. Being under the discipline of a branch of the military did his psyche damage that he had to face up to while also trying to stay alive.
There's either a good fiction story or a good biography lurking under the prose here, unfortunately it doesn't work for me and I would have a sneaking suspicion that it has a limited audience.